Following the POWER format, the next step in writing a novel is E, editing. During this stage, my instructor has assigned us the task of reading my piers novels. We are then to give them some feedback on how they can edit and improve their novel. There is a total of 2 letters I wrote, one to each my friends.
The 1st letter is written to Leo. Leo is the writer of "Plight of the Siren" You can find his revised story and website here.
Dear Leo
After reading your masterpiece, I am blown away with your use of words. The flow each sentence and paragraphs definitely fit in together. Although nothing really stood out and resonated with me, I really enjoyed reading the story. One thing I think you should add to your story is the exposition. Even though the use of words and the whole story was wonderful, I was really confused with the characters in the story. Adding a short description of who is talking at the start or end of each dialog sentence would be helpful for me to digest the story. Now, a thing I really want to know about the story is the location the city is based on. Other than that, this is an amazing story and I’m speechless about it. Literally.
The 2nd letter is directed at Fern. Fern is the writer of "Who Am I" You can find her revised story and website here.
Dear Fern
After finishing “Who Am I” you recently wrote, many questions were pouring out of my head. This is one part I enjoyed about your story, the mysteriousness of it. Many questions and plot holes were still unanswered albeit this can be beneficial to your story. In this case, it gave the story an inner depth which requires the mind of the reader to resonate or understand. Moving on to the characters in your story. There are clearly 3 main characters in this story, the stepdad, mom, and Jack. These characters have quite different stereotypes from my perspective. The stepdad seemed extremely strong both physically and mentally at first but was shown to be vulnerable due to his dark past. Weird and stupid is what I would describe the character of the mom based on her actions. The stepdad was obviously trash and worth dumping, this is something she did not do. This is one of the things I would also like you to improve on and it would be awesome if you did. Then there is Jack, he has a nice background and is a well-balanced character. The murderer that is revealed in the ending was very unexpected, which I like. Before giving you my advice, I do want to know how Jack fought the stepdad when he killed him. He is weak and frail yet won a battle against him. My advice for you moving forward is fixing your grammar, tweaking the characters to fit the plot, and fixing some scenes to be more sensible.
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